Peer Evaluation for 20323 최유림

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

Her essay deserves 5 points. Her essay is techincally perfect, and very persuasive.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I think her essay is perfect so she don't need to improve it.

Thesis
What is the thesis?

Language or culture, which one is more dominant?

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes and Yes.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

Language is more dominant than culture.

Any other thoughts?
Her thesis is interesting. I think this thesis can make good persuasive essay.

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

There are 5 parts of the classical argument.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
The introduction catch my attention because she inserted some theories. Also, it comfortably lead to the thesis.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Yes. She wrote narration by citing expert's theories.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes. Her confirmation support the thesis very well.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes. Her refutation and concession adequately dispute the counterpoint.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
Her essay is very persuasive.

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I agree with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I still agreed with the thesis.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
I did not change my mind.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
It's persuasive, but if she add some additional sources, it will be more persuasive.

Research

Is the author using research effectively? 
Yes.

Is the research from appropriate sources?
 Yes.

Are the sources obvious?
Yes.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes, sources are relevant to the thesis.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
It's enough to support the claims.